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Story Title : When it Swims it Rains
Author : Asoko_Desu
Status : Complete
Word count : 944
Post Date : 2024/12/01
Begins : Before Bundle of Hisao – decades before
Warnings : A monologue, mostly.

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I stayed way past closing. We talked into the night – he gave me one of his carvings and I ...

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Reminds me of some proofreading edits I had back from Lap recently where he kept asking what 'Room for a little one?' meant.

OK, fine - I'll bite; what does "Room for a little one?" mean? (no - Urban Dictionary was no help, I checked)

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Nice one - fun and unexpected; fertile ground for future stories I'm sure! Also - seems I'm not the only one with dancing on the mind

sat all on her tod…

is this slang? If so, it's from a part of the world I haven't been to.

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Story Title : Shake, Shake, Shake
Author : Asoko_Desu
Type : Side-Story - part of "Adventures in the 'Emiverse'"
Status : One in a series
PoV-character : Hisao
Pairings : Rin x Tetsu
Begins : After Mama Bears
Warnings : Silly, but no one can be unhappy all the time, one hopes.
Remarks ...

Very engaging and thought-provoking - and enjoyable! It left me with questions, but, like Rin, I'm unable to put them into words right now .. how very appropriate. I think I'll bookmark this one and come back to it again after having had a chance to reflect on it.

And thank you for posting your ...

Ah - all the suaveity (is that even a word? Suaveishnes? No, probably not) we all wish we had :)

I really like what you did to bring out the chemistry between two characters who aren't often in the spotlight together (Ever together? I keep finding gems hidden in posts from years ago so who knows ...

Really sweet, well-written, and completely believable 🙂

One suggestion - ‘translate’ / ‘translating’ would be ‘interpret’ / ‘interpreting' in my locale, in a sign language context - ie. one would retain a 'sign language interpreter' for situations such as these (don’t know why - possibly because ...

When I grow up I want to write like you do - that was really wonderful; the characterizations were especially vivid.

What I very much appreciated - Something from Suzu’s perspective; I have’t seen a lot of that. I also appreciated getting inside her head a bit - character’s thoughts are always ...

Better eleven+ years late to the party than never I guess.

Very well done one-shot; a very good characterization of how Rin communicates her emotions, and how Hisao finally sees things from her perspective - so much hope. For the record, I think that Rin’s not at all good at forgetting - she just ...

I've certainly upset the apple cart here with some of my characterisation choices but I think/hope they make a certain amount of sense given context. Dust Bath is interesting, I did like the visual of Rin's mind being a series of drawers with timers she always means to come back to.



Aye - that ...

That was nice - too bad the image it links to is mssing. I think I see what you mean by ‘recontextualise KS into a different kind of space’ though .. and now I have a lot more one-shots to read!

Not entirely in the same vein, but you might enjoy Dust Bath . It recontextualizes the characters, but ...

Thank you! It was fun to write - glad you enjoyed it!

Speaking of, I've been reading Flutter and very much enjoying it - your style of writing is drastically different from mine and it's refreshing. Waiting until I get caught up before commenting, but that might take a while

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Story Title : Noughts and Crosses (complete)
Author : Asoko_Desu
Type : Side-Story - part of "Adventures in the 'Emiverse'"
Status : One in a series
PoV-characte r: Rin’s parents - Mr. and Mrs. Tezuka
Pairings : Rin x Tetsu
Begins : After Home Phone for Sweetie
Warnings : Painfully homey ...

And so the intrepid couple is off to a running start in their life together - no pressure!

Looking forward to seeing where university and paternal oversight takes them - I suspect an apartment of their own is in their future :)

One note - you may be using the same text processor as I do; some of ...