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by Asoko_Desu
Fri Dec 23, 2022 1:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Re: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces

First one was nice. Didn't even think the "other"'s send-in could be anyone other than Kenji... The reason for Rin's birth defect was Thaliomide poisoning, not misuse of medicamentation - at least in Raita's concept drawing. IIrc it was not specified in the VN itself. Dust Bath is a very ...
by Asoko_Desu
Tue Dec 20, 2022 6:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection
Replies: 12
Views: 26858

Re: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection

Miki, slumped in the futon and only partly awake, half-opened one eye - through the window behind Hisao she saw a thatch of messy blonde hair. Dark eyes met hers and winked - then they were gone. Now my thought, then, is that Akira is our Christmas agent here then? I was going to write this as a no...
by Asoko_Desu
Tue Dec 20, 2022 5:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection
Replies: 12
Views: 26858

Re: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection

Thank you so much for such a charming and gracious review - that's going under the tree as one of the nicest gifts I've received in a long time!

🙇‍♂️
by Asoko_Desu
Mon Dec 19, 2022 12:46 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection
Replies: 12
Views: 26858

Re: Secret Santa 2022 - Story collection

re: Secret Santa 2022 - S13 submission — “No Time Like The Presents” For Feurox See end for the prompt. Apologies for typos / continuity errors - I stand in the company of giants. _____________________________________________________________________ The ryokan was old - tucked away in the woods by a...
by Asoko_Desu
Thu Jul 28, 2022 5:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lullaby of an open heart - A Saki pseudo-route
Replies: 7
Views: 10003

Re: Lullaby of an open heart - A Saki pseudo-route

A very nice, somewhat meditative walk through the established part of the timeline and into new territory - enjoying this very much! Lower drama than what I've been reading of late, and the change was due.
by Asoko_Desu
Mon Jul 25, 2022 8:01 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Not Like Him - Rin Oneshot
Replies: 6
Views: 8447

Re: Not Like Him - Rin Oneshot

"Now he just thinks I’m being dumb. The planets don’t matter. If he wants dumb though, I’ll be dumb. Maybe it’ll stop his questioning." I like this - I hadn't read this when I wrote my bit from Rin's perspective ( https://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=13275&p=247982#p247996 ), b...
by Asoko_Desu
Tue Jul 19, 2022 7:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Closure
Replies: 58
Views: 74929

Re: Closure

Ooof - that hurt, but in a good way.

Depressing - as in "depressing that I'll never write that well."

Wonderful as in - "Wonderfully evocative and believable."

Written in the true spirit of KS - thank you.
by Asoko_Desu
Fri Jul 15, 2022 3:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Re: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces

Three years late to the party, but found this on Reddit today - seemed germane:
by Asoko_Desu
Sat Jul 02, 2022 2:50 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: 2400 words from a path never written.
Replies: 47
Views: 41174

Re: 2400 words from a path never written.

My $0.02, 10 years late.

This was short, poignant, and sweet - like Saki's life. I can't help but wish - like many people, I'm sure - that there was so much more to the story.

A wonderful example of emotionally evocative writing on a character who stands out with her own distinct personality.
by Asoko_Desu
Mon Jun 27, 2022 4:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (New NSFW Art 2/22)
Replies: 1207
Views: 1182412

Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Double Update 3/14)

Absolutely enthralling - a prodigious, humbling tour de force. You've set the bar for other authors almost unattainably high; I look forward to your future updates!
by Asoko_Desu
Mon Jun 27, 2022 3:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)
Replies: 13
Views: 20757

Re: Dead Heat, an Emilogue (A Post Bad End Emi Epilogue short)

A perfect short epilogue - nothing missing, nothing superfluous. Totally believable and achingly poignant - bravo!
by Asoko_Desu
Fri Jun 24, 2022 11:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Re: Dust Bath - a short side-story (complete)

Rin's a bit more vulgar than I'm used to but I do like the mental tricks she uses. Thank you - I do appreciate the feedback! Re: Vulgarity, I agree - my representation of Rin’s internal dialog is mostly based on my experience of being a teenager - how we thought and what we said were often very dif...
by Asoko_Desu
Wed Jun 22, 2022 7:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Mountain Pose - a short one-shot (complete)

Thank you again to everyone who’s made contributing to this shared narrative possible! Story Title : Mountain Pose Author : Asoko_Desu Type : Slice of life Status : Complete PoV-character : Rin Pairings : NA Begins : Before dawn Warnings : Navel Gazing - literally Remarks : We're all early risers a...
by Asoko_Desu
Wed Jun 22, 2022 3:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Re: Infinitely More Than We Can Ask or Imagine — A short one-shot (complete)

To be fair, I have to say that this is a really good piece. I'm more a "the longer, the better" type of man, but, the concept of the piece is incredibly good. Hisao's heart attack could have killed him in reality, and the fact that he's sent into a "afterlife" place is on point....
by Asoko_Desu
Sat Jun 18, 2022 11:30 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
Replies: 37
Views: 105615

Dust Bath - a short side-story (complete)

Story Title : Dust Bath Author : Asoko_Desu Type : Side-Story - part of "Adventures in the 'Emiverse'" Status : One in a series PoV-characte r: Rin, Emi Pairings : Emi x Hisao, sorta Begins : Before ‘Saving Throw’ Warnings : Possible spoilers for Emi’s Good Ending, Navel Gazing, Character...