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Oh, wow, okay. When I suggested you write long-form commentary on other works, I legitimately wasn't thinking about my own, I swear. That being said, I can't tell you how much I appreciate it. The amount of time you must have put into this, even if you were just writing straight from your brain at h...

Honestly, Chatty, if you want to post additional long-form reviews like this to some of the other major works on here, I think the writers, old guard, and us newbies would all enjoy reading the fresh perspective! I enjoy reading through the discussions that took place back when these fics were being...

Really good summary of the story, man. I think you highlighted most of what made me love Developments so much. I managed to read it in about 3 days the first time, if I remember correctly, so don't feel like you rushed it. (I was off of work at the time). Thanks for taking the time to do this, even ...

I had to pay very close attention and reference the original chapter, but I think I managed to spot at least a few differences.

Ow. That hurt to read, man. Seriously though, very well written. I can't quite say I enjoyed it, per se, but I was certainly immersed. I feel like this is a totally valid way of seeing how things could have gone. Not all endings are happy ones. Hanako's self-hating and self-destructive tendencies co...

Oh, wow... Um- hello there. Yeah, I manage to work all of those into my sentences one way or another; I do it correctly, I hope. Or close enough (I also use parentheses, which are unusual in prose, but I find them an effective way to express thoughts underlying other thoughts, etc...) and yeah. Than...

Absolutely love this. Other than Learning to Fly, this is the long-term fic that I most hope to see completed on here. I'm into the drama with Suzu and Taro, and Molly is utterly lovable. Eagerly anticipating the next chapter, however long it takes.

Another ongoing story on here! First of all, I have to say you have an awesome talent for creating interesting settings, and intermingling the dialogue with actions. I feel like most of my dialogue is 90% just the characters talking, with little else happening other than their expressions and body l...

A thing I’m starting to notice in your writing style is that you really love long complex sentences. Yeah, this is actually more of a problem for me than you likely realize. I'm aware of it, and a part of my editing process is chopping up overly long sentences. So what you're seeing is AFTER I'm tr...

I guess the usual critics have gone astray for a bit. Yeah, I sorta expected Mirage to rip me a new one within the first week, based on what I've read in other threads, lol. The alternate interpretation of Iwanako's letter feels plausible and interesting, for example. This idea about her letter bei...

It's been a few days since Hitomi reassured me I hadn't crossed a line by asking after her, and while I can't say I've been feeling great since then, I'm doing a little better. I managed to get an acceptable amount of sleep for two out of the last three nights, and feel like I'm starting to finally ...

A student named Hitomi in Lilly's class, huh? For some reason I was kind of expecting somebody different. :wink: :wink: There's an odd jump between when Hisao goes to find the library and Hisao helping Hanako look for Lilly. Having played the game, I can more or less fill in the blanks, but just re...

No, I haven't been neglecting our girl Iwanako for my other story. It's interesting writing two at once though, especially because Hisao is a different person in each. Writing a new version of him is one thing. Writing two increasingly differing versions simultaneously is quite another. Please call...

Thanks for all the feedback so far. I'm enjoying this story, particularly because I like discovering where it will go, but also because I get to work through some things I've had to deal with or am dealing with by projecting them into Hisao's situation, in a way. Probably not fair to him, but hey, ...

Another good chapter. Can't wait to see more of Hitomi so we can learn more about her. One question, did Hisao swear in any of the other routes? I think he has but I don't think he's ever said "fuck". Who cares though, Hisao has multiple personalities throughout the different routes. He s...