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by Lap
Thu Jul 11, 2024 4:15 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Intentions [Completed]
Replies: 28
Views: 5295

Re: Intentions [Completed]

Thanks for a thoughtful exploration of the impact of Emi's thoughtless actions. The notion that this would totally break her is depressingly believable. I'm just sorry you couldn't work Rin into the story-- as Emi's closest friend, and as someone with a very different viewpoint on life, she might ha...
by Lap
Wed Jul 10, 2024 7:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Secret Santa 2023 - Story collection
Replies: 30
Views: 78346

Re: Secret Santa 2023 - Story collection

I've at (very) long last completed my SS for Naryzhud/NoticeMeOppai. It's over in my one-shots thread: Tatties in the Oven. Hope it was worth the wait, Nary!

by Lap
Wed Jul 10, 2024 7:44 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New July 10, 2024 - "Tatties in the Oven"
Replies: 48
Views: 46395

Re: Lap's One shots & misc - New July 10 2024 "Tatties in the Oven"

Tatties in the Oven Secret Santa 2023, for NoticeMeOppai (Naryzhud) ______________________________________________ Hanako was stretched out on the recliner in Rin’s studio, reading a book on her phone. She wasn’t modeling at the moment, but on her days off from work she liked to just spend time wit...
by Lap
Sat Apr 13, 2024 10:04 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Wordplay - (Akio x Hisao one-shot/pilot)
Replies: 3
Views: 1116

Re: Wordplay - (Akio x Hisao one-shot/pilot)

Another fine work from Sharp-O, which is no surprise, but a welcome addition. This was most excellent, the KS world needs more gay stories. :D The fact that it's focused on Hisao makes it even better. It feels like it's expanding on your SS story for me, which I love. Also, I adored the idea of Hana...
by Lap
Tue Dec 12, 2023 3:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "A Matter of Memory" 05/01/24
Replies: 376
Views: 260289

Re: Sharp-O's One-Shots! "Tender & Wild" (SS23) 12/12/23

Goddamn, the Random Number Generator Gods have smiled upon me this year! I was grinning like a fool reading this, it was lovely, and more than I ever could have wished for. Thanks for making a somewhat banal prompt into such a lovely little story! :D

by Lap
Tue Nov 14, 2023 11:58 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap
Replies: 13
Views: 16980

Re: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap

"A wretched soul, bruised with adversity." A particularly ironic epigraph, given how easily hemophiliacs (Haru) bruise. Shakespeare, btw. :-) (Okay, yes, I had to look it up. I'm not Ritsu...) (As I warned you, I'm lousy at analysis & deep thinking about stories, so all I really have ...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:31 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 26669

Consequences of Comfort

Epilogue --- Shiina looked through the shoe rack in the entryway of the apartment a second time, trying to find her shoes. “Miwako? Have you seen my black flats?” she called down the hall. When there was no answer, she shook her head at her mistake. Right, she’s doing overtime this week, with that ...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 26669

Consequences of Comfort

For the next several days, at around seven in the evening, Shiina received a text message from Shizune. Deleting the messages unread became easier with repetition, but she was surprised when they stopped coming after only five days. That’s a relief , she thought to herself. Trying to convince hersel...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 26669

Consequences of Comfort

Kasumi Miyata turned out to look like what Shiina had assumed her grandmother would look like—short and plump and full of smiles. “You can call me Grandmother Kasumi,” she said as they introduced themselves. “And you might as well call me Grandmother Aina, so we know which grandmother you’re talking...
by Lap
Sun Nov 12, 2023 4:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Consequences of Comfort
Replies: 11
Views: 26669

Consequences of Comfort

Thanks, as always, to Feurox, for reading and suggestions and making me think about what I'm writing. What you're about to read is a much better story thanks to him. Thanks to Naryzhud (NoticeMeOppai) for additional proofreading and feedback. Thanks to Zee McZed for still more proofreading, and for ...
by Lap
Thu Nov 02, 2023 1:41 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Flutter Bonus Levels (One-Shots) - Counter Breaker [31/5/24]
Replies: 43
Views: 61616

Re: Flutter Bonus Levels (One-Shots) - Player Two [02/11/23]

First off, there isn’t a doctor (or friend) in the world who would lead off with “She died,” unless they’re a sadist who hates the person they’re talking to. That’s something that comes up in conversation later on, while filling in the details. That kind of opening just comes off like a cheap shot t...
by Lap
Wed Sep 27, 2023 11:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap
Replies: 13
Views: 16980

Re: Trapped all the Same - An unfulfilled SS20 Prompt for Lap

God. Damn. Wow. Just… Wow. No tears (sorry!), but definitely an aching heart. I’ve always been in awe of your writing, but I truly think this is one of the best, if not the best, stories you’ve written. I am humbled and amazed to think that I might have had even a little bit to do with the creation ...
by Lap
Thu Apr 27, 2023 9:50 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scarred Muse
Replies: 21
Views: 42698

Re: Scarred Muse

Thanks for your comments! Sorry I’ve not responded sooner; a broken wrist has slowed my writing considerably… I’m afraid I am a fan of one-liner chapter closers, so they’r here to stay :P As to the scent thing, yeah, I noticed that too myself on rereading. Shoulda dialed that back a bit. So very gla...
by Lap
Wed Apr 12, 2023 1:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scarred Muse
Replies: 21
Views: 42698

Re: Scarred Muse

Well, those kinds of negatives I can live with. :D I've got a couple of other stories about Hanako & Rin in my WIP pile, hopefully will finish them Someday™.

Thank you for your kind & thoughtful words!
by Lap
Mon Mar 27, 2023 10:13 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Avenues of Communication (Complete)
Replies: 72
Views: 55765

Re: Avenues of Communication (Complete)

Thanks for the read, and taking the time for such in-depth feedback. It's readers like you that really keep me motivated! I confess I probably see more flaws with this story than my readers do—it was definitely a journeyman work (along with Home ), and there is much I would also change about it wer...