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Okay... Everything was all fine... Until you brought in Miki... I know there's not much to go on in the VN, but I really had a hard time buying that character even before she broke out the joints. (How do you work out an arm without a hand, and why would you? Emi smoking joints tops the whole ridic...

Thanks! Hope I can keep it up. I think I'm in the home stretch for act 2 now.... this is turning out to be significantly longer than act 1, I'm fine with that, though. --- Chapter 16: Intermission Hanako made her way down the hall, carefully placing each step as she watched the tiles pass by underne...

Chapter 15: Recovery “Mmmpff…” Hanako smacked her lips together a few times, her head still fuzzy and ringing. It was like she had died and gone to heaven: the heat and sun had been replaced by cool air conditioning and a bright white light directly above her. For one terrible moment her stomach lu...

I like this a lot. And it's interesting to hear about Hisao's actions, but not actually see him. It's good to see Hanako growing on her own as a person and embracing a more open attitude, even if she's still hesitant and skittish. Glad to hear it! Those are both things I decided about this fic from...

One thought I had was that maybe Rin would bring up the mystery of Hanako's bathroom visits (in one scene in the game she refers to Hanako as "Mystery Toilet Girl" and says something along the lines of, she has a world record for times gone to the toilet in one recess).

In the reply screen you have buttons to bold text and such right above the text box--you want the one to the left of the font color (droplet) button. It looks like a chain link. Highlight the text you want to have a URL, then add an equals sign and the link you want to use, as such: [url = link]samp...

Alright, I changed some of Lilly's dialogue there. Hopefully she comes off as clearly trying to nudge Hanako in a certain direction without being quite as direct and overbearing about it. Thanks for the feedback, btw--I really appreciate the help. --- Chapter 13: Connection Hanako had thought Lilly ...

I had plenty of friendships like that in high school and college--people who I hung out with once or twice for some reason such as a group project, then didn't see again outside of class for a semester. Sure there are people like that. I've been in the same class with people for years without getti...

Okay, made some edits where needed and added a note to the first post. There is no longer any significant time skip between Act I and Act II. Considering how few actual changes were needed (most chapters remain untouched, and even in the ones that did, really only a few sentences had to change), I a...

I had plenty of friendships like that in high school and college--people who I hung out with once or twice for some reason such as a group project, then didn't see again outside of class for a semester. If you're close friends who have already built up an expectation of regular interpersonal contact...

Yeah, I intended for a time skip that does not really change anything, my idea being that they indeed don't see much of each other for some time between the end of Act I and start of Act II; I imagine Shizune and Lilly claiming most of the time of the two of them, each being the more dominant person...

Yeah, there's a big time skip between Act I and Act II. A big one. Maybe I should have made that more clear.

Chapter 11: Deflection Hanako sat with Lilly in their designated tea room, occupying the tableside which left her good side facing the sun. The scarred side of her face was more sensitive to temperature so direct summer sunlight could be uncomfortable for it. Lilly took a slow sip from her cup, pin...

Very solid considering you are not a native English speaker! I like your approach to Hisao's internal monologue/thoughts, you did a pretty good job with that. There are lingering grammatical errors but that's a minor issue. I wish you luck with this project!

Chapter 10: Continuation Hanako had mixed feelings about Sundays. Occasionally she might see Lilly but more often than not it was their “day off.” Lilly did have other things to attend to in her life, after all. Today she would probably be working on festival things with her class. Hanako knew she ...