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by QuietlySomething
Wed Apr 26, 2017 2:40 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: People-Watching: A Naomi Inoue Pseudo-Route
Replies: 52
Views: 36236

Re: People-Watching: A Naomi Inoue Pseudo-Route

Thanks for the responses everyone! Flattered that some people from here followed me on FF. Will try to get/keep this fic caught up, asap. I hadn't really given it any thought but yeah, I suppose the author's note really was pretty unnecessary. But don't worry, that definitely won't be a regular thin...
by QuietlySomething
Mon Apr 24, 2017 9:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: People-Watching: A Naomi Inoue Pseudo-Route
Replies: 52
Views: 36236

Act 1 - A Completely Chance Encounter

So as I mentioned, this story starts off in Act 1- in particular on the day that Hisao finds himself in the middle of Lilly and Shizune's spat. This chapter is an encounter that takes place as Hisao returns to his dorm after class, rather than running into Rin working on her mural as he normally wou...
by QuietlySomething
Mon Apr 24, 2017 9:54 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: People-Watching: A Naomi Inoue Pseudo-Route
Replies: 52
Views: 36236

People-Watching: A Naomi Inoue Pseudo-Route

Hey folks! This is a fic I've been working at for a while now on FF.net; after talking to a few people I decided I feel comfortable moving it away from home :P I've just recently lost my beta-reader to a concussion (bless her) so I'm currently without an editor... but that may be subject to change. ...
by QuietlySomething
Mon Mar 27, 2017 12:34 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

I started to feel bad for Hisao in the Shizune chapter at first. it seems she's become even more insufferable with time. I actually started to feel bad for Hisao a the start of the Shizune chapter. She seems to have become even more insufferable than ever. Likewise her people skills seem even worse...
by QuietlySomething
Thu Mar 02, 2017 7:11 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

I enjoyed your epilogues. I've been procrastinating on studying all week by reading KS stories after replaying the game the previous week. The characters feel rather accurate to the game, although Mutou's lines in Shizune's story was a bit strange. I understand you had a line in there that tried to...
by QuietlySomething
Tue Feb 28, 2017 3:37 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

Something that comes up several times in your writings: There's a reason Lilly and her are still so dangerous around each other. "Lilly and she" Her and Lilly Satou, if you…" "She and Lilly Satou" people are together in their own gangs and don't pay Rin and I any mind at al...
by QuietlySomething
Mon Feb 27, 2017 11:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

HoneyBakedHam wrote:I'm enjoying your work so far, between this and the Naomi route on FanFiction.
Oh hey, thanks for checking me out on FF. Yeah I was thinking about putting that on this forum but to be completely honest I'm not sure how I feel about the quality of it myself yet :?
by QuietlySomething
Mon Feb 27, 2017 8:10 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

I probably wouldn't have repeated all of Kenji's speech again. It's nice that it seems to provide a common feature for each arc - like Iwanako's letter does in the VN - but in the VN it is also not included in its entirety in each route. As it was I found myself skipping those paragraphs as soon as...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

--- Left to my own devices, and feeling desperate for something to do besides eavesdrop on Lilly and Masaaki, I wander a little from them and realize just how alienated I feel from the overall crowd. I would like to start a conversation with somebody else, just so I don't look like such a loner. Aft...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Trial by Fire

--- Our brief silence is interrupted when a microphone screech cuts into the room and silences most of the commotion. "Uh, hi- uh, hello everyone… good evening." It's a familiar voice, and I turn towards the front to see Oikawa, the head of Yamaku's History department- and rival of my boss...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Trial by Fire

--- We're left alone again, and now that it's just Lilly and I, I feel justified in saying, "What a mess." Lilly cranes her head down, giving me a small frown. "What is?" My unimpressed frown is unfortunately lost on her. "Did you really have to try and start a fight?" ...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Trial by Fire

--- Lilly positions herself on the front porch as I shut the front door, and with no delay I slip around to the other end of the house and pull the car up the driveway. In my usual awkward fashion, I stumble back out of the car to lead Lilly to the passenger seat, but she takes my hand with enough g...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Trial by Fire

--- "I'm ready for you!" Lilly calls from the other room, getting Akira to practically leap out of her seat. I follow her in with Mitsue over my shoulder. In the kitchen, we find Lilly fully absorbed in her cooking and hunched over the counter, scooping tin foil-wrapped pieces of fish onto...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:43 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Trial by Fire

Chapter 5: Trial by Fire " The time is… five… o'clock… PM. " The quiet, computerized voice rings out from the digital clock on the other end of the room. Surprised to hear it, I glance up to check the time, despite the fact that it was just read to me. "Five already? I feel like I ju...
by QuietlySomething
Fri Feb 24, 2017 1:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)
Replies: 46
Views: 23153

Re: Hindsight (5 Epilogues - Complete)

Okay... It will take me quite a while to get through all of this. Not sure how the individual stories are supposed to build up on one another if they're all based on the good endings. They are kind of mutually exclusive :-) Thanks for your insight! Of course the endings themselves are mutually excl...