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Coziness realized, centers British English, again. We spell words differently. knocking down, makes his/it a different matter Neither of these are really incorrect, they could just be more correct. You'll probably see me do that a few times, it's just a personal taste thing. The knocking thing in p...

1-09: Drift 'Now you're absolutely sure you don't mind?' I ask Yuuko for the seventh time. She looks up from teasing the cat with a string bookmark and gives me a reassuring smile. 'I'm sure I'll appreciate the company,' she laughs, the cat hopping on the desk and nuzzling into her shoulder. I cont...

'I always drink Chai on days like this. This is actually an Oolong blend of it,' she offers, maintaining the pursed smile. 'Oh, I didn't notice. Is there ginger as well?' I meekly return, mind still threatening to buckle down on me. 'Mm. I added it myself.' She smiles a little broader at that, but t...

1-08: Inflict Rain gently patters on my window, streaking my view of the grey morning with the beginnings of a dreary day. It must have rained all through the night. I lean back from my window and return to my mirror, steeling myself with a deep breath. I can get this right. Wordlessly, I part my h...

Sometimes you inexplicably slip into past tense for a while I'm a bit slippery with tenses. Thanks for catching those. I also like the story so far - could become one of the best Rika stories around here if you keep it up. Oh, that's very nice of you. I will do my best. Hope you get better. Don't f...

Saki returns with teapot in one hand and a tin of tea labelled Nilgiri in the other. I smile at her opting for something strong, and she catches me and smiles back. 'Now that's more like it. Ready to talk?' She requests over her shoulder, busying herself with brewing the tea at her counter. 'Ready a...

Sorry for the absence there, I've had a terrible flu. Still do, just well enough to actually make it to my desk today. --------------------------------------- 1-07: Withdraw By this point, the rain and unseasonable cold had soaked so thoroughly through my socks that I'm beginning to wonder if I did ...

Nah, she's just in denial. Hisao being around has made her feel worse about her own condition and looking at Hisao is like a mirror for it. She's denying they're the same because she doesn't want to admit her condition is as bad. She hasn't dealt with it well, that's all. Her reactions are exaggerat...

- You use apostrophes instead of quotation marks, which makes me try to read all dialogue as interior monologue first. A bit inconvenient, but I'll get used to it. British English has slightly different rules regarding syntax than American English. How we use quotations is probably the most evident...

1-06: Silhouette Lower than sixty beats per minute, higher than one hundred. My hand brushes over the diagram of an irregular heart-beat. I've read through the book twice now, and I still haven't found my answer. With a groan, I rest my weary head on my desk, pushing aside the books for now. To fin...

1-05: Conditional "What is the third conditional?" Tapping my pen on the desk, I silently mouth the question again and again. On any other day, I'd have finished the entire exam by now, but today it may as well be in another language. I mean, it is, but that's not the point. Pushing the E...

1-04: Pause Sometimes, I think I'm awake. Sometimes, I find myself still lying there on that field, Emi laughing and pulling me to my feet. She jabs me in the arm and tells me to look where I'm going if I'm going to run that fast, that I didn't see the girl I bumped into and fell. We laugh about it...

Your writing is good and I'm looking forward to reading more. Ah, thanks! I'll bring over a few more tonight. Couple mistakes here, during that conversation you split rika's speech which makes it look like saki starts talking at first. Then for the last part: "take our turns to sigh with relie...

1-03: Release Gym class is a very strange affair here, and why wouldn't it be? The towel pinned gently under my chin while I glance around the changing rooms, every person has a different rulebook in front of them; a different list of limitations that they'll have to carry through their lives, obey...

1-02: Control A flurry of pages erupts into the air in time with the shrill din of the alarm. Groggily, I try to catch them as they fall back down, unpeel the page from my cheek and stumble over to shut off the damned clock all at once. The resulting fall lands me in a pile of my notes and pages, b...