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Okay, finally have access to a computer now, so I'm going to give my detailed opinion on this so far:

I have to say, there's one massive flaw I have with this story - you have a bad case of excessive sesquipedalian loquaciousness i.e. you use too many big words to say things. Normally, this wouldn ...

It's a very early draft and I don't know the arc by heart, but dammit, I'm trying! Expect it to improve greatly by the time it is completed.

Good start. The only real comment I have is that Lilly seemed to respond to Hisao nodding to her. I'd quote it, but I'm on my phone too. Or at work, to be ...

coming soon - further revisions are neccesary

Coming soon - further revisions are neccesary

Greetings! Long time lurker, first time poster - and I figured it set that first post off with a bang by delivering my own work for the community. After reading Sisterhood last year, I was inspired to do my own FF. I hope you all enjoy it as much as I have writing it.

EDIT 9/10 - Coming soon after ...