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So fucking good, been waiting for this almost two weeks (i think), and wanna know something, it was worth the wait.

Really loving it so far, and i know i'll keep loving it. <3

Wes Anderson got nothing on this.

I think my main problem was just how sudden the mood changed back and forth, I know in your first chapter you want to intrigue the reader , but the characters were doing a good enough job of that themselves.

I still hold it’s a massive reaction given the information we’re presented, I think ...

AntonSlavik020 wrote:This isn't bad. The only real comment I have is you could do a better job with time skips, particularly when they went to the cafeteria. Besides that, decent job so far.

Thanks mate, i really appreciate it.

BTW i'm loving all the feedback right now, keep it going. <3

Usually, when someone decrlares from the start that they are going to write a whole route for their first piece of fanfiction ever, I get ready for the worst.
In this case I don't think I need to worry too much. :-)

Oow, that's such a nice thing to say. <3

Most new authors tend to use too few ...

Feurox wrote: Obviously we don't know what's caused that reaction, something so extreme to something so petty, but if it's a quirk of a character, then to me at least, it's intriguing to see why

That's exactly what i thought when i was doing it, that's why i didn't change that part.

I’m sorry, daddy, I promised you that I'd never leave work undone.

Not while I can complete it.

Tears start flowing down my face.

This is such an extreme reaction for not finishing newspaper club stuff. If it’s because she’s reminded of her dead(?) father, then show us that, because it feels ...

Hi, didn't see you there.

This is the first time i write fanfiction, actually is the first time i write something that isn't homework.
First i started this as a One-shot, but i realized that i didn't wanted a One-Shot, i wanted the Natsume route that KS lacked, so i made it, or at least i'm ...

Quick question.

Shouldn't Molly be referring to the other girls who she doesn't got any kind of connection by their last names, like Ikezawa instead of Hanako.

Just saying cause i thought i saw it somewhere in chapter 2 and i'm to lazy to quote it.

Really good, you're getting better at it.

Really liking how you made Molly's personality, fun part, that's exactly how i pictured her.

Keep the good word.

It's all fun and games until Suzu is fucking someone other than Hisao.

With that said, i would like to tell you that i'm liking it so far, keep the good work buddy.

God damnit bryt, you did it again, kudos, cheers, lots of love and keep the good work.

Edit: i forgot to say that i loved Emi's ending, so sad but.... I don't know which word to use that can describe it, i think beautiful might be that word, i don't know, lots of mixed feelings.

One of the saddest ones after Closure, but still, soo depresing i knew there was something wrong, i knew it couldn't be a happy story with a happy end, but still was pretty good.

I don't think i've cried while reading a fanfiction since Closure. So damn good