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Just letting everyone know that I have added Ambiance links to Chaper 8, so Feel free to Check it out guys!!!! Here

brythain wrote:Hmmm, 3-7 doesn't seem like a proper room number in the dorms. They're 3-digit numbers, as far as I remember.

I will look into changing that, thank you for letting me know!

It didn't take you long to post here, huh, Mirage_GSM? :mrgreen:

You know that CYOA-style stories are frowned upon here, right?
I suggest you take down that link, before it gets taken down.

I didn't know, and have since taken down the link. I just thought I would have people who like my story ...

Before you read : Ambiance has been added! Just click the links in between the paragraphs, and then listen along as you read. Some Ambiance links you will click will have multiple scenes within them, in which I will write out in bold for you to mute the specific channels and then unmute the other ...

Wow guys/gals, my fanfic has gotten over 700 views. I honestly didn't think my fanfic would get this much, but thank you all so much for reading my fanfic, and continue to read it. Here's to 700 more!!!

Now for something I want to do with chapter 8. I've notice that people like the idea of me ...

I knew someone would think Kazumi is just another Hanako, and I'm trying my best not to make her seem that way. It's not so much she is nervous around everyone, but just guys, and there is a reason for that. Also, she isn't, well you know, burned. I understand where you're coming from though, and I ...

Oh you Mirage_GSM, always there to help me and my work haha. I appreciate your criticism every time you post here. You have definitely helped me further my skills in writing since my first few chapters

I don't think their interactions o far warrant that - and he forgot the name of the first girl ...

Chapter 7 - A Gift of Friendship
http://i.imgur.com/iRrzEBKl.jpg

I spent the rest of the week studying, running, chatting with Ryo and Natsumi, repeat. Needless to say, I have been exhausted come Monday, and yet, I was happy. Monday is when Akemi returns from, thanks to looking at her "greeting ...

Chapter 6 - You Learn Something New Everyday
http://i.imgur.com/ckImUYFl.jpg


I woke up the next day feeling a bit tired, but not as bad as I thought I would be. I couldn't really focus on my homework last night, because I was thinking too much about yesterday, and how fun it was to run track ...

Just letting anyone who wants to know that I have corrected some grammar mistakes, and I've done some rewording on Chapter 5, so feel free to read again.

Side Note - Chapter 6 & 7 are almost done being written, and I'll have at least one up by the end of this week(with a drawing of course :wink ...

Also, it's not a bad idea to get several chapters ahead, if your writing style allows for it. That way, you can make sure events you set up in an early chapter don't screw things up in your later chapters, and rewrite earlier chapters as needed to fit where the story's going.

That's not a bad ...

A general tip is never to post your stories as soon as you finished writing them. Let them sit on your harddrive for one or two days, then read them again - reading them out loud to yourself is optional but recommended for beginners.
You'll be amazed at the stuff you'll notice that you didn't ...

Apart from some general grammar issues you tend to say the same thing two or even three times:
She kept her word ans stuck with me for the rest of the practice , ....

Eventually practice ended, ... Natsumi was there by my side the rest of the practice though, and.... "Hey Natsumi, I just wanted ...

Chapter 5 - Running's Hard...
http://i.imgur.com/YSwIbPZl.jpg


The next morning arose, and I was quick to get up and get ready to go to class. Never have I felt so happy to wake up early in the morning just to go to class, but it was for a good reason.

I got dressed and ready to go, and like ...

So I did a lot of thinking today while I was at work after reading Mirage_GSM's post, and I've made a few slight adjustments to how this story flows if you will.

1) I found a grammar correcting site, and with it, I have touched up all my chapters, and I've also done a little rewording within the ...