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It doesn't matter if it wasn't there first language that just means they need to take the time to learn it wich means that sometimes they are better then use. I'm sure as hell mirage is better at grammer then I am and I'm not "offended" 'offended' = 'embarrassed' or 'upset' in this case. ...

First of all, you can edit your posts. It feels neater if you combine your replies into one post rather than make 3 or 4 posts in a row. I'm also a bit offended that I'm getting an English lecture by someone living in Germany (implying). I feel like a stereotypical fat 'Merican redneck now. Don't y...

I noticed that Hisao's parents both got out from the right side of the car. That's probably an oversight. Is there a reason why you're putting those [choice1]/[choice2] parts in there? Only one choice actually seems to do something. Wouldn't it be better to omit those parts altogether? Also, I kind...

And about the whole administration coming to the door ordeal, that gets elaborated later on. There are some ... interesting ... things to be found out about Yuuko ... Hisao kinda just figures it out on his own. I knew I'd get nitpicked on it. It'll make more sense later.

I noticed that Hisao's parents both got out from the right side of the car. That's probably an oversight. Is there a reason why you're putting those [choice1]/[choice2] parts in there? Only one choice actually seems to do something. Wouldn't it be better to omit those parts altogether? Also, I kind...

Lots of analysis Well, then. Didn't expect to get manhandled on grammar! :shock: If anyone wants to edit for me for now on, be my guest, since nothing is going to be added until this problem is solved. I'm also a bit offended that I'm getting an English lecture by someone living in Germany (implyin...

Endorphin Rush – An Emilougue (GOOD ENDING) Chapter 0 - “A New Constant” “What do you want to do today?” I ponder a few moments on my thoughts with a large grin on my face. “Well … I’ve met your parents now. I think it’s about time you meet mine. My mom would adore you!” “Can’t wait!” I stretch fro...

About to post this up! Just as a side note here before we get started: this is an epilogue, after all. There are character progressions. The character actions throughout will slightly change and therefore may not 100% represent what they once where in the story.

monkeywitha6pack wrote:I think I'm getting a bit to much credit ^^* I'm not really proof reading more beta reading and pointing out not grammar issues

And I'm honestly not too concerned about grammar. The original game itself wasn't exactly the epitome of grandiloquent speech patterns.

It is now in the final stages before being posted! Already proofread. monkeywitha6pack has volunteered to proofread further, help with brainstorming, and artwork! His avail is definitely not without being recognized.

UPDATE: Finished proofreading. Now, to rearrange the bad ending's and proofread that. Directly afterwards, I'll post one of them here.

UPDATE: I'm about 3,000 words in, and closing on Chapter 0. need to proofread and edit, now.

Slow down there, tiger. If you don't have any writing experience and you're promising us two epilogues (and you mention wanting to rival the size of the actual route), I hope you already have a very detailed plot outline written down. A project of this magnitude could easily take months and that su...

And I forgot to add, I'm going to make two different versions as well. A good ending and a bad one. They will both start with the alternate good ending; the one where Hisao apologizes to Emi on the track. I'll show the choices in brackets, and then show the one chosen a line down. I'm also going to ...

You do promise a lot. Out of curiousity, have you written large projects before? Usually when someone posts an announcement of a very large fic, rather than a fic itself, and has no previous experience, I'm a bit skeptical. My personal preference when it comes to writing is writing the whole thing ...