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I understand that shoplifting is an unpopular topic, and I'm not a supporter of the idea to begin with, but I was looking for practice to improve my writing style and an anon on /ksg/ requested the story so I did it. I am unsatisfied with the end product and would very much appreciate all the critic...

“You guys sure you’ll be alright on your own?” Akira asks. “Yup! ~” Misha exclaims, jumping a little to show her enthusiasm towards their little shopping trip. “Alright, have fun” Akira swiftly grabs Hideaki‘s hand, turns around on her heel and heads off. [Where do you want to go first?] Misha signs...

First off I'd like to say thanks for the warm welcome guys, I'm here to stay and I've got a few more small projects in mind before I tackle anything like a pseudo route. Secondly, I've made some changes to the text with more details explaining the setting, which would make it easier to understand wh...

Okay I've taken the advise I've been given into consideration and attempted to repair the damages.
I have edited the original post with a "fixed" version and I would appreciate feedback to know what are my other weak spots and get to work on them.

Thanks for the criticism BlackWaltztheThird I guess I should explain that The lack of punctuation was purely out of laziness, but I see how negatively it impacted the text. I also felt that I was using the same word to start consecutive sentences while I was writing but I didn't pay it much heed. Th...

I wake up one morning with my senses being brutally assaulted; the sound of running water is so unusual it’s almost unsettling. The refreshing scent of mint toothpaste lingering in the air beckons my sense of smell to come to life. I get up and rub my eyes to see the blurry sight of Hanako leaving t...