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This is a comic relief chapter, Hanako POV. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- (Also deleted, this is now in the main story here. ) --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------...

Hardest part for me honestly, is something small. Trying to constantly come up with titles for each scene. I do try to be clever whenever I can. First, wait until the scene is written, then name it. Don't try to write to a title. I'm no longer naming my chapters, choosing to use that space to state...

Potato wrote:I wonder if Emi would like DDR...

There's a very similar game that involves hitting "drums" with your hands (and I don't mean Rock Band), so there's always that if she's not inclined to play DDR.

So... that Prologue unfortunately breaks what I had intended to be my cold open, but I don't really have a means of invoking flashbacks in this format. Compromises sometimes have to be made, not everything can go first at the same time.

And now I'm tempted to explore some of that... By all means, you want to do the sequel, do the sequel. :D Having seen a good deal of it thus far, "sequel" doesn't even cut it. "Expanded into a novella" might be more accurate. :mrgreen: I think I may have infected him with the &q...

Tone: I'm not sure I would want to write in a quiet and polite tone, although I certainly know how. For one thing it would make everything twice as long, and for another I'd probably fall asleep in the process. But yeah, that too is largely a consequence of the style I've chosen to use. I can under...

bhtooefr wrote:I'm actually giving myself the challenge of avoiding any H for this. Mainly because I know I'll butcher any H that I try.

Pistoning! Pistoning! Pistoning! *throws a chair*

Re: WIP

I counter that with this.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/w2l02gc5qqpy0 ... lina18.jpg

Somehow I've gotten it into my head that if Emi spoke English, she'd sound like a Valley Girl. Like, totally. I am so sure.

This isn't even a whole chapter, just a piece of one, but hopefully it makes sense by itself.
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(Deleted -- it's now in the story as posted. Like, totally.)

You have more POV switches than a beauty pageant, but at least you labeled them clearly - you'd be surprised to find how often that's not the case. As a result, it's sort of hard to say what you're trying to do here since there doesn't seem to be a major focus to concentrate on. I suppose "sli...

(Excerpt deleted as redundant, I just posted it to the actual story.)

I was never terribly fond of the formatting limitations of the site, and the scope of this work has been steadily growing as I make progress which is not all that amenable to forum posting either. (Changing the order of chapters, or inserting a new chapter in between two existing ones, for example, ...

This one is definitely going to be disturbing and filled with memes.

      Stumpfist and Kenta,
      Elbow-deep in chocolate.
      Too many lemons.

Ever wonder why Nurse seems to be ridiculously close to Emi, to the point of arousing suspicion? Me too. This was my attempt to explain it. ----------------------------------- “B–but why ?” Emi is practically spitting her words at this point. I suppose I might do the same in her position. I sigh and...

Or not, I don't care. Anyway this is where I'll toss anything that I think can stand alone. This may mean it's a one-shot, it may mean it's a chapter from the longer work in progress but requires no knowledge of the back story to make sense. Comment and critique if you like, but rudeness will be met...