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Thank you Blasphemy, you had good corrections, so I have made some adjustments to the text. It's not a very long piece of writing, yet it's remarkable how errors can creep up on you!

In the case of the Nurse's dialog - I'd imagine he'd keep to a pretty informal tone most of the time, partly to keep ...

Ah, a fresh story concept, an intersting OC and a well written story.
I like it.
Except for an additional "as" in the third sentence I didn't notice any mistakes either.


Oh, and welcome to the forums!

Thank you for the feedback! I fixed the mistake you mentioned and I'll keep working on ...

"Here's your water."

I take it and drink it gratefully. I hear a chair creak as the Nurse sits across from me at his desk. He waits patiently, expecting me to make the first move, I guess. From what I can make of his expression, he seems to be working hard to stay neutral, but I see the worry in ...

There's a brief pause where I can only hear the sound of wind and the Nurse's breathing before he speaks up again. The night seems to have sucked away all the other noise and I hear my heart pounding in my chest. I close my eyes and see a vision of cold dead eyes staring at me, a begrudging ...

Hello everyone this is my first time posting on these forums, but I have been following the development KS for quite some time and would like to take a quick opportunity to thank 4LS for their dedication in making KS a reality.

Only recently have I looked at the fan fiction boards and have been ...