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monkeywitha6pack wrote:I saw this image on the shimmie...

Groovy! Thanks for the link. I've actually never been there before. I know what I'm doing this weekend!

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CM

. . .this one is a much stronger effort. Thanks, and I agree. I was much more inspired (and had much more free time) with "Hisao's Gift." I never did get "Clearer Than Words" to sound the way I wanted it to, but I'd been working it off and on for three months, and it was time to get it out there ...

That was a sweet story. ... And the Rinisms seemed spot on. Thanks! I'm not sure what it says about me that I get compliments on my "Rinisms." :D I'm afraid you probably won't be seeing any long, involved stories from me. I'm pretty limited on free time (been working this story since November), and ...

Sea wrote:How would it end?

I never really thought about it beyond the scene. I didn't try to "fit" it into any of the game's existing paths. It was just a neat daydream I had that I worked together into what you see above.

Thanks for the compliments!

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CM

I agree with the posters above me: This was a very nice story and you captured Rin pretty well. No matter how many times I look through my work, I can always count on Mirage to find the little things I didn't notice or errors created by last minute edits. You certainly have an eye for detail ...

The premise of this story could be said to be that Hisao and Rin share a dream. I really use the dream solely as the vehicle. It's the metaphors in the dream that I wanted to give focus to. I think I ended up with two "messages": 1) a metaphoric dream-trip of Hisao's experiences at Yamaku Academy ...

... some sort of Machiavellian mental judo match. Love that description, and really enjoyed the story. Had some comments to make about consistencies before I realized A) the age of the original post and B) who the hell I was talking too (always, always, ALWAYS know your audience). I bow in humble ...

Rin: Clearer Than Words By cosmicmustache [Based on the Rin Tezuka path of the Four Leaf Studios’ visual novel “Katawa Shoujo”] The ringing of the school bell and subsequent explosion of shuffling students anxious to exit the classroom brought Hisao back from his mental wanderings. Mr. Mutou’s scienc ...

Thanks for the compliment! I still have a hard time when I go back and read this one. I haven't had the opportunity to do much writing the past few months, but I have a new Rin story in-work. The working title is 'Rin: More Than Words'. That'll make 3 Rin pieces for me...I wonder what that means ...

As part of the "inspired by Katawa Shoujo" crowd, I began developing a list of activities and items from the game that I wanted to try for myself. That effort eventually morphed into an attempt to create a "Bucket List" of all things Katawa Shoujo as captured in the list below. I searched the KS ...

Your writing style is more a jumpy poetic than smooth narrative. It works okay for something this short, but much longer and it can be too disjointed. Someone commented about not liking how so many of the short stories on the forum have a sad ending. I don't think most of us write with the 'intent ...

I like this one. A good vignette, and I think you captured Hanako well! I don't know that the first person narrative worked for me, but that's personal preference. I also would have liked to have more details on the setting...what the place looks like/smells like/feels like. Is this the jazz club or ...

Nice, quick read that brought a smile to my face! I liked the interplay between Misha and Rin, and, as someone observed already, Rin sounded very 'Rinny.'

Oh, and 'Vanilla flavored' for Hisao--brilliant!

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CM

I liked it! I agree with Mirage that it was a little too detailed and measured out though... What bothered me though is that I don't find Rin's work (what we see of it anyway) being particularly Picaso-ish... Glad you liked the story overall. As a Business/Eng Lit major, I did the best I could with ...

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