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I assume what you're looking for is the generic act transition, only the first three notes are shared with Three Stars. Anyway, I sat down and worked out the notes myself a while ago. Now, I don't know jack about music theory, and have absolutely no idea what is acceptable syntax when it comes to ...

Wow. This is really turning into something spectacular. I can see this potentially being my favourite fanfic in the future. Your writing keeps getting better, and the conflict grows more and palpable every time there's character interaction. Also, I really love these quirky little devices you use in ...

Congratulations on a job well done! The conclusion was satisfying, I had a good laugh at the accidental proposal. I think my favourite part overall was the karaoke scene. I squee'd like a fangirl when Kenji started singing Metal Machine . It's not hard to imagine him in Joakim's place... It's been a ...

I like this so far. I only found a couple of errors: (Part 4) American's are so clueless Extraneous apostrophe. (Part 6) She has severe burns to the left side of her face. The scarring is on her right. Your left. No, no, your other left! :P A lot happened in that last chaper. The whole thing with ...

I'm glad to hear that you're ok, and hope your condition continues to improve.

In regards to the story, it's as engaging as ever. Good work. I'm really loving the Junichi/Miki interactions, quite entertaining.

SEE YOU, SPACE COWBOY...

I found a small inconsistency in that Lilly requests a drink from the vending machine, with no way of knowing that it's even there. I went back to the VN to check, Hisao goes to buy the drinks of his own volition, and Lilly is largely unfamiliar with the area. If you don't want Junichi to take the ...

This story is going great. I didn't really find any errors in this chapter, but I found the latter half of this sentence a bit awkward: I notice once more how lazy her movements are, but how she never seems to miss a step. I think " and yet she never seems to miss a step" rolls off the tongue better ...

All I know is my intentions in writing this story are as pure as they get: I want to help people, to invite them along a path of catharsis and healing. You're succeeding. Nothing like some real tough times to make me a little overly dramatic, ha. Nevertheless, it's what I really feel. I'm beyond ...

mysterious scraps of blue paper Other than the "drawing from the hat" situation, the other potential scenario that I thought of when Assbutt saw the slips of paper was that the other club members voted to kick someone out, but they did it when he wasn't around because they knew they'd nominate ...

This was a very exciting chapter. Everything Sabin said above me mirrors my own thoughts.

This story gets better with every chapter I read, it's now at the point where I'm yelling at the characters out loud.

Currently working through act 2 of your story, and I'm loving it. I particularly like your Rin. I hope she gets to play a bigger part later. I don't have any criticism of note just yet, just want to say thanks and keep up the good work! I'll report back if I have any comments once I'm finished.

Aiko, Amaya, Tadao, Kenta, Yoko, Naoko... Um, seven? Those six are the ones that got enough page-time to say they're fleshed-out. There's Joyce, Ito, Nobuo and Miyoto you could make a case for, and now maybe Jun and, if unmentioned tertiary characters count, Taro, but I wouldn't be willing to plant ...

Fantastic story, just wanted to give my thanks after a marathon reading session. As with many people here, I've been avoiding stories with OCs, but I'm pleasantly surprised by your cast of 7+ well fleshed-out OCs. I feel much more inclined to read more OC stories in the future now. Aside from the ...