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Don't read this while eating lunch. I'll just leave it at that.

Anyways, I'm not surprised you wrote this while dunk. I would be more concerned if you were sober.

I was just thinking about when this would get updated next. Even if a story ultimately has a good ending, I've never been a fan of break-up scenes like Kano leaving the council. I know some drama has to happen to make the ending more rewarding, but this is one type of drama I just don't like. I tend...

I love your writing. This is one of my favorite completely OC stories right now.

Anyways, I wonder if Iwasaki has a crush on him or if she's just manipulating him using her feminine wiles(sp?). Either way, I'm looking forward to more.

Well, it looks like Seiki is going to find out what Hisao's condition is in the next chapter. I have a feeling she's going to tell him her's soon after. Looking forward to it! Also, it seems kinda harsh, even by Shizune standards, to blame Seiki for Hisao's heart acting up when he was the one over-e...

Nice cliffhanger. Looking forward to more!

Half the time I read Haichi's name i read Heihachi from Tekken instead, which is amusing if you know who he is. :) Anyways, another great chapter. The only odd thing I noticed was I close my eyes and just listen to the sounds around me. I’m not really sure why I keep my eyes open but I do. Are her e...

I liked it. Not a lot to go on story wise quite yet, though I did like the uncle. It was emotional and I didn't notice any errors, though other people are probably better at that. I'll be following this.

I can't say whether this is better than before or not as I don't remember what it was like before, but what you have now is really good. Looking forward to more.

I don't watch RVBY so a lot of the references likely went over my head, but this was interesting none the less. I don't think I could personally do what Hisao did as being a traitor is one of the few things that are virtually impossible for me to forgive, regardless of motivation, but this was still...

Well first of all, walls of text are not fun to read. You should fix that. Also, your grammar was pretty bad, with run-on sentences everywhere. It also felt a little rushed, though I'm not sure if that was because of the formatting(I was sort of skimming because of it) or not.Kinda hard for me to ju...

I agree with brythain, the first part was better. The main thing wrong I noticed were the many grammatical errors, but that can be significantly minimized simply by getting an editor. For a first piece, it wasn't bad.

Great chapter as always. That may have been the worst response Natsume could have had to the kiss. Then again, it was a pretty poorly timed kiss on Naomi's part too, what with them being so emotional at the time. I'm sure Natsume will try to talk things out with Naomi the next day, after she's thoug...

Did Emi dye her hair? Since when was it pink? That said, I think pink highlights would work on her, though maybe not pulling a Misha and dying all her hair pink. Anyways, solid chapter. I really liked the Rin scene as short as it was. I feel like you got her down pretty well. Also, my favorite part ...

Took me a while to remember which story this was due to the name change, but once I did I got excited. Really enjoying this story so far. As for the chapter itself, I liked it. I liked how whenever she starts to think romantically about Naomi, she pushes the thoughts away and comes up with another r...

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It's interesting however that with all the problems she's having, she seems to be perfectly able to interpret facial expressions

I thought it said at one point that thats something she's still struggling with. She didn't have a problem with Misha because her's are so exaggerated.