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i think that the first sex scene in sisterhood was as meaningful as it was because we see Hanako's point of view during all of it. if we see her reasoning she can still have her "essential cuteness" through all of it.
still keep it up, its getting better

sexual scenes are not really necessary in some fics, and i think this story can get away not having any if it becomes too problematic

I'm hoping in future I can make Hanako a bit more independent. Constantly doing Hanako gets upset - needs comforting stories might get old after awhile.[/quote] i cant guarantee i will be the most dependable for proofreading but i think i can help if you want 8)[/quote] Thanks! I've got about 2/3rds ...

despite what you said, you really seem to have a knack for writing. its nice to see these kind of innocent story's every now and then. please keep it up :wink: Awww, that really means a lot man. Thanks. Of course any technical help/punctuation fixes any can help me with would be appreciated. Or ...

despite what you said, you really seem to have a knack for writing. its nice to see these kind of innocent story's every now and then. please keep it up