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by AlphaWarMeister
Sat May 11, 2013 11:26 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 2 uploaded*

Chapter 3 Class didn’t take too long. A long lecture about balanced equations and different chemicals. Pretty basic stuff, though some people can’t seem to find it impossibly difficult. The bell calls for a lunch break. I’m not really hungry, but I welcome the break from school work. The only probl ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Thu May 09, 2013 11:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 1 uploaded*

Chapter 2 It didn't take too long to reach the classroom. Kenji seems to know his way around the school pretty well for being partially blind. He opens a door and walks through quickly. I follow at a slower pace as I scan around the room at all the people around. It is a pretty average size room ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sun Mar 10, 2013 5:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Chapter 1

Chapter 1 “An interesting design for a gate,” I’m standing in front of the gate to Yamaku, staring at the ironclad designs. “Very interesting,” As I walk through it I take a look at my new school. Very normal looking. For being a school for the disabled, I expected it to look much different, more hos ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 5:49 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story)

but the character so far is a mannequin bad-um tish , very robotic in his acceptance of a dead daddy. Gonna have to agree here. Not angsting about the eye I can believe, loosing one's father, not so much. It's not that he doesn't care, but he is painfully realistic. He knows that there is nothing ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 1:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story)

Very interesting prologue, although the formatting is a bit weird and monotonous. Since you're using 1st person, to make it easier for the reader, I'd suggest using something akin to script format or prose (Sorry, I don't know much about writing), and separating the character's thoughts from the ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 12:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story)

I don't regret anything that happened that day. Why would I? I can't change it, so I won't dwell on it. I would just have to see how things would work out for me. I am sort of interested in how this kind of personality will clash with others at Yamaku. I'm also curious about the reason he did not ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 12:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story)

Hmm... Are you going to turn this into an OC thing? If so, the character seems to fit the bill. Besides the formatting issue that may make it harder for the audience to read, the disability is belivable, but the character so far is a mannequin bad-um tish , very robotic in his acceptance of a dead ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 9:33 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Re: Zade Wither (My own KS story)

Hmm... Are you going to turn this into an OC thing? If so, the character seems to fit the bill. Besides the formatting issue that may make it harder for the audience to read, the disability is belivable, but the character so far is a mannequin bad-um tish , very robotic in his acceptance of a dead ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Mar 09, 2013 1:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*
Replies: 15
Views: 7103

Zade Wither (My own KS story) *Chapter 3 uploaded*

(this is my first written story so please be kind, and please post constructive criticism :D) (Prologue) When I was 16, my dad and I were working on fixing our personal generator. When we started it up, something had gone wrong and it sparked a gas explosion. My dad had only enough time to attempt ...
by AlphaWarMeister
Sat Feb 16, 2013 1:11 am
Forum: Fan Works
Topic: Katawa Shoujo: The Journey (Closed)
Replies: 105
Views: 46390

Re: Katawa Shoujo: The Journey (Recruiting)

I would love to try my luck as a voice actor if given the opportunity :) This whole project is an amazing idea and i would love to be part of it. If not voice I could always help with organization or even editing if need be. I added you on Skype so we can talk more if you are ok with it. I also have ...