Maybe Rin shaves. That would be impressive.Raziel wrote:Raziel wrote:How does run lack a bush but Emily has one? I think it should be the other way around...
Emily = emi.
run = rin
Autocorrect screwed me over.... again
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- Thu Mar 21, 2013 3:24 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Ask!
- Replies: 4989
- Views: 6637665
Re: Ask!
- Thu Mar 21, 2013 3:21 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 211173
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/21]
Solid chapter :) Yuuko seemed even more tense than her normal canon appearances (based on the swearing); I suppose that has something to do with Kenji. Yuuko thanks Mr. Ito again, and hurriedly dashes inside to change into her uniform. A comma followed by "and" functions similar to a semic...
- Wed Mar 20, 2013 5:53 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Thoughts on the H-scenes?
- Replies: 1289
- Views: 320304
Re: Thoughts on the H-scenes?
Out of curiousity, why does everyone believes so firmly that Hisao holds the idiot ball constantly throughout the VN? Pretty much all of the actions of his that i remember from the game are, while not perfect, rather understandable for a deppressed teenager. For me, in order to classify someone as ...
- Wed Mar 20, 2013 5:36 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 211173
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/19]
...And five dozen fanfic authors looked over their shoulder, shuffled their feet, then laughed nervously. It's not something to lose sleep over. Scissorlips' Suzu route is still my favorite work of fanfiction, and it is chock-full of commas in places that wouldn't be acceptable in, say, a master's ...
- Wed Mar 20, 2013 12:40 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 211173
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/19]
Suregriffon8 wrote:When I get around to posting my next story, I hope you treat me the same way.neio wrote:Consider it a compliment. I normally don't get that in-depth with fanfics here because there are more egregious errors to be dealt with or there are simply too many of them.
Shoot me a PM when you do.
- Tue Mar 19, 2013 10:46 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 211173
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/19]
Gaah, it's my high school English teacher all over again. But it's a fair point, and I need to hear it as much as it may be loathed . Consider it a compliment. I normally don't get that in-depth with fanfics here because there are more egregious errors to be dealt with or there are simply too many ...
- Tue Mar 19, 2013 10:10 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Ask!
- Replies: 4989
- Views: 6637665
Re: Ask!
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Ok, I think I've deciphered it.
Rin uses her toes to paint. She's defying her condition, just like the legless wonder-runner does.Why does Rin paint instead of Emi? How does she do it?
- Tue Mar 19, 2013 10:02 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 211173
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route (OCxHisao) [Updated 3/19]
I admit, I've been avoiding this route because of the OC, but it's actually a great read. It's obvious you've spent a lot of time on it, and you have a better grasp of technical English than most other fanfic writers here. Here are my thoughts on Scene 12 after my first reading (and maybe a few on t...
- Tue Mar 19, 2013 1:54 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Ask!
- Replies: 4989
- Views: 6637665
Re: Ask!
How does run lack a bush but Emily has one? I think it should be the other way around... Emily doesn't want to be a gardener, but there's maybe something there about Emily's family circumstances that make her obsessive about house plants. Bushes get in the way of running so it's pretty natural a ru...
- Mon Mar 18, 2013 7:22 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: What arc should i try next?
- Replies: 985
- Views: 261562
Re: The Devotion Sickness
Hey look, a squirrel!HLGU wrote:by the way neio, where did you get such high resolution pic of Emi?
it's even bigger than the game's resolution !
- Sun Mar 17, 2013 11:29 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: What arc should i try next?
- Replies: 985
- Views: 261562
Re: The Devotion Sickness
It's completely normal. The first time I got Emi, and the second time I went for Lilly. On the second playthrough, though, Emi bumped into me in the hallway (see attached). I muttered to myself, "how am I supposed to NOT love that?" Cue puppy eyes. I played Emi's route again. :oops: Eventu...
- Sun Mar 17, 2013 9:54 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)
- Replies: 916
- Views: 742919
Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)
Freaking Shizune waiting for them at the dorms, I would've told her to screw off and walked past her. I was infinitely frustrated reading about Shizune splitting Hisao and Suzu up, it's not even her place to involve herself in such matters. The mark of good fictional writing is the ability to impar...
- Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:04 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
- Replies: 449
- Views: 371599
Re: "Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route
Who did the cover art?
- Sun Mar 17, 2013 2:00 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Hanako and Lilly having sex [Warning: Pure Yuri]
- Replies: 52
- Views: 21533
Re: Hanako and Lilly having sex [Warning: Pure Yuri]
Your writing leaves a lot to be desired. You change tense often for no reason. There are very frequent spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes. While it seems to be the norm for literotica, your use of childish metaphors for sexual organs and their uses takes away a lot of the mood of the story...
- Sun Mar 17, 2013 12:08 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness
- Replies: 186
- Views: 72013
Re: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness
I watched that for a disturbingly long timeDanjaDoom wrote:yes.gifepicmuffin18 wrote:YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES