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by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 11:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) On hold until 3/9/13

kinda weird how this thread went from two pages too four in the span of a day
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 11:11 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/3/13)

Statistically, Emi tackles 90% of all new students within two days of their arrival. ... Subverted for once^^° You used the word 'image' when you meant 'imagine'. And 'runaway' should be one word here. At least, I think that's why Mirage quoted it. The change from getting run into by Emi to Ikuno i...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 11:08 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) On hold until 3/9/13

Maybe it is just the way I read into it, but some aspect(s) of his condition I could imagine, wouldn't go unnoticed by like Shizune or others well she did notice his arm shaking. and as she said err... signed [Naomi has told me a lot about you and your daughters] so its safe to say she knows about ...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 10:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) On hold until 3/9/13

I've been through this thread quite a few times recently, and aside from issues already brought up. I think that you really need to plan this out a bit more before releasing it. I will say that I am in no way qualified to make any critical notes about this, but when starting up, make sure to have t...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 9:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) On hold until 3/9/13

okay fixed
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 9:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 12 Updated
Replies: 46
Views: 13961

Re: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 3

I never liked her nick names in the VN because i never knew how to friggin pronounce them. I always assumed they were pronounced like "High-Chan" and "Shy-Chan". They're not. :) They're actually pronounced like "Hit-chan" and "Shit-chan." :lol: you have got t...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 9:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/7/13)

i added a poll at the top of the page for he next two day's cast you're vote there
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 9:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/3/13)

I tried, but I simply can't get into this. I keep mentally picturing Shizune's brother and the school's librarian whenever you refer to Hideaki and Yuuko by name and it throws me out of the story every time, Naomi as well, to a lesser extent. I agree. There's a reason stories don't use the same nam...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 8:02 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/7/13)

anyone have a complaint about my writing style or how i characterise some characters? I'm just making sure i have everything before i continue writing scene 4 so feel free to bring up problems from scene 1 or 2
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 7:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 12 Updated
Replies: 46
Views: 13961

Re: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 3

I never liked her nick names in the VN because i never knew how to friggin pronounce them. I always assumed they were pronounced like "High-Chan" and "Shy-Chan". They're not. :) They're actually pronounced like "Hit-chan" and "Shit-chan." :lol: you have got t...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 7:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: Chapter 1 Scene 3:check up time.

“I mean come on straight to the mount? Hmph! You have no class Ikuno!” she says in a disappointed tone. “Damn it Miki! That isn’t what I was doing!” the light brown haired girl in the same frantic tone. “I take it that you’re Mister Winters?” I turn and reply with an entertained voice. “Yes I’m Hid...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 7:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/3/13)

The disease gets worse as time goes on or when you don't use your medication. and like the nurse said he got it from a parent it isn't unheard of for it to be hereditary some kids develop it around seventeen (Hideaki developed it around eighteen)
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 5:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/3/13)

so how does everyone feel about Hideaki's disability being Parkinson's disease?
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 5:38 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A Painful Past (OC). Scene 2 is up.
Replies: 75
Views: 25757

Re: A Painful Past (OC) SC 3 update (3/3/13)

if I’m ever told to report to the principles’ office. I'm not sure if Yamaku has an office of principles. If so Shizune would probably occupy it. The principal might have an office in the administrative building, though. ;-) it collides with me with what I image is the force of a run away freight t...
by LorSquirrel
Thu Mar 07, 2013 5:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 12 Updated
Replies: 46
Views: 13961

Re: OC: Mirrors and Windows. Chapter 3

I never liked her nick names in the VN because i never knew how to friggin pronounce them.