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Mahorfeus wrote:By god, a story in which Shizune's mother isn't dead?

Amazing, isn't it? I had to read it twice to realize that.

I've got a bad feeling about this Yeah but no one since the last chapter seems to be willing to type it down that Lilly might end up killing herself. Though I'm not sure. dewelar writes really really well, but I'm not sure he (she?) wants to pick up something as big as an undertone of grief. So who ...

I agree with the sentiment that it seems to swing heavily in favour of either ending on a Hanako-Hisao relationship or at least ending on something hinting towards a future with that. But... much as I thought a few dozen pages back that I'd dislike a "happy ending" in that sense, I feel the way you ...

Wow, and to think I followed this the entire time.

Very nice ending, and overall, amazing work. Now the real question is: what do you do with your storywriting experience now?

Squeeeeeeee!!

(that is all)

Hrm, congrats. You're one of the first writers I see writing a vulnerable and broken Lilly (with her way of living behind a practices persona only being second to Misha in the VN) in a very consistent and believable manner.

Very awesome chapter.

Yes. You can't just stop on a teaser like that!

You did push Noriko from obnoxious to really interesting rather quickly there, yes. Though personally I think she's good at what she is right now, because if she becomes more prominent it'd be too sudden. Ofc, you present her as someone who doesn't wait one second to act on her impulses, but still ...

Really nicely done. Thank you.
I initially wanted to post about some minor details, but someone was faster than me.

Very interesting chapter. I was expecting you to have some sort of positive surprise plot change to Lilly's return.

And I'm quite happy - this being a post-neutral-end story - that there isn't, and you're continuing the plot as it is.

"Hanako," she says, returning to her serious tone, "I hope your first confession turns out better than mine did." :'( (Shizune bad end was my natural play through) Very interesting chapter, especially how you wrote the panic Hanako shows and how Misha interacts with her. If I had to criticize ...

Very nice update. Thanks.

I regret that I have to make a post like this, but there's going to be some delays on this coming chapter. More than what's already been suffered through ;___;. There's just a lot of stuff going on in my personal life at the moment. Too much drama, for one. I'm sorry, I'm still working on the next ...

Now I'm sort of thinking that this being a post-bad-end story, it'll in itself not have a happy ending at all. Which would be mighty interesting if written really well. And so far the writing is top-notch.

BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:Quite like myself. I had thought Thanatos' thread had updated when I saw this, actually, given the date in the title.

Same. I had a brief moment of panic when I thought Thanatos had deleted the thread, because I opened this and only saw two pages.