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by TonyTwoFingers
Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)

Thank you for the kind words, everyone! -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yamaku's main building is packed to the brim with students and visitors alike. Some of the townsfolk quickly take to mingling with students and faculty, while some cling to the walls ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Tue Mar 26, 2013 5:36 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Evangelium [Hanako x Lilly's Bad End]
Replies: 21
Views: 12257

Re: Evangelium [Hanako x Lilly's Bad End]

Thought I'd offer my two cents on the piece. There are plenty of errors with tense changes, punctuation, and other things that people have already pointed out. I will confess now , this is my training for a writting contest a few months from now. Just remember, even in a writing contest, these ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Sun Mar 24, 2013 8:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 03/24)

Hey everyone, this is the 23-days-later update. Sorry it's taken so long, and if you're reading this at all, thanks for being patient. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Rin scarfs down food faster than should be ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Tue Mar 05, 2013 12:04 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Katawadvertising
Replies: 2
Views: 3284

Katawadvertising

Just something fun I decided to do in a bit of free time. Modeled it after Western cartoon-vice ads, like when the Flintstones advertised for Winston Cigarettes. I am now being informed by my lawyers that it's spelled "Setou". May god have mercy on my soul.
by TonyTwoFingers
Mon Mar 04, 2013 12:32 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 03/01)

Okay, now Yori is just being the stupidest he can be. He's just been told that he needs to keep eating, then skips breakfast and lunch . Skip breakfast and lunch #unbreakable :wink: Congrats, you bear witness to my first post. I like your character, as well the concept. I've seen another OCXLilly ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Fri Mar 01, 2013 10:56 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/22)

OtakuNinja wrote:Nice chapter. I really like how he became friends with Rin that quickly. :D
Thanks so much for the feedback. Hope you're enjoying it so far!
by TonyTwoFingers
Fri Mar 01, 2013 2:49 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 03/01)

CHAPTER TWO: PIANISSIMO The sun wakes me up before the alarm goes off. Last night feels like a vivid dream - a hazy memory that may or may not have happened. I shake my vision into focus and stand out of bed. I’m surprised by a knock at the door just as I finish getting dressed. “Hello?” I ask as I ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Sat Feb 23, 2013 12:57 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/22)

First of all, big thanks to everyone for taking the time to read. “Still impressive, though.” It actually isn't. She heard him with Misha who is in class 3-3, so it would be natural to assume he is, too. But maybe he is just laying it on thick here. Yeah, it's not really the most impressive logical p ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Fri Feb 22, 2013 3:42 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/22)

Hey everyone, sorry for such a long wait on this update. Writer's block to the max on this one, and I needed to cleanly wrap up the chapter in a way that felt somewhat organic and conclusive. Please, any criticism is welcome, and seriously appreciated. Constructive would be helpful! Nothing is too ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Wed Feb 13, 2013 10:57 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective (Updated 2/28)
Replies: 77
Views: 34021

Re: Hokkaido-Lilly's perspective

Okay, boring stuff out of the way first: "To find a place like this in Japan nowadays...It's kinda anachrostic ". I believe the word you're thinking of is "anachronistic". I could be wrong though, so take that with a grain of salt. As I inwardly laugh. I was beating off suitors far before that. I ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Wed Feb 13, 2013 10:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/10)

Thanks for the kind words everyone! And so the plot begins to move... Well hell, it had to happen sometime! Sorry for being the millionth-billionth person to begin a fanfic with an arrival at Yamaku. It's unoriginal and boring, but it felt like the best way to open things up, especially with Ken's ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Sun Feb 10, 2013 4:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/10)

I back towards the doorway, Hanako’s eyes following me the whole way. “Again, thanks for having me,” I offer sheepishly, slipping through the door. Lilly calls out from the table. “It was a pleasure having you!” The door clicks shut as Misha beams at me - a stark contrast next to Shizune’s slight sco ...
by TonyTwoFingers
Tue Feb 05, 2013 10:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/03)

OtakuNinja wrote:A great chapter. Looking forward to the next. :D
Thank you! As always, appreciate the feedback. Looking forward to writing more!
by TonyTwoFingers
Mon Feb 04, 2013 7:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/03)

demonix wrote:This is the only mistake I picked up on.
TonyTwoFingers wrote: “Bye Hicchan! We’ll be back in just a few minutes!”
Well, that was embarrassing. Fixed it - thanks for the eagle eyes!
by TonyTwoFingers
Sun Feb 03, 2013 1:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 04/02)
Replies: 57
Views: 20579

Re: Golden Slumbers [OC x Lilly] (UPDATED 02/03)

Shizune silently gravitates toward a shelf of books, immediately eyeing and grabbing several volumes. Misha stands in the center of the library with me, her thin veneer of affected excitement not managing to hide her disinterest. “Here you are Yori-chan, the library!” she exclaims loudly enough to dr ...