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by LordDarknus
Sat Dec 01, 2012 3:53 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trusting my judgement
Replies: 12
Views: 6067

Re: Trusting my judgement

I'm going to stop. I've completely lost my touch. I wouldn't stop if I were in your situation. You show potential. You're already a lot better a writer than MANY other fanfic author's I've dealt with in the past. Learn from your mistakes and keep trying. You've definitely got some passion for it, I...
by LordDarknus
Sat Dec 01, 2012 3:47 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Red Fish Blue Fish
Replies: 24
Views: 11350

Re: Red Fish Blue Fish

(Also, if I'm not mistaken, there's a line "Oh my, Oh my, Oh dear, Oh dear!" in the 'One Fish Two Fish, Red Fish Blue Fish' story, so that's even more fitting of Lilly given how she often says that) That's a remarkable coincidence that I'm going to claim was intentional. :wink: YOU EVIL E...
by LordDarknus
Sat Dec 01, 2012 3:39 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Katawa Ball Z Kai condensed
Replies: 8
Views: 5224

Re: Katawa Ball Z Kai condensed

Oh yeah, forgot this was here,
BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:I stopped reading after the third line. I thought you should know that.
Oddball wrote:
She reveals that they were all Saiyans, a proud fighting warrior race. From Space!
That's it. I'm done with this.

So..... you guys aren't Dragon Ball fans huh?
by LordDarknus
Sat Dec 01, 2012 3:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Kenji's Story
Replies: 11
Views: 5431

Kenji's Story

"Cloudy day...", The words escape my lips before my brain catches myself knowingly say. I stare up at the beautiful softness of the greying darkness in the sky, Memorising it and mesmerising myself with the easing calmness in my mind's eye. My parents' car pulls away into the distance, Fre...
by LordDarknus
Wed Nov 28, 2012 7:05 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trusting my judgement
Replies: 12
Views: 6067

Re: Trusting my judgement

Interesting... It's not often that you get to see a story where Hisao comes across as less mentaly sound than kenji usually does. He seems to go from dangerously unstable and manipulative to hopelessly over dramatic. Thank You, Oddball. For your post. It's very generous of you. I'm going to stop. I...
by LordDarknus
Wed Nov 28, 2012 7:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Red Fish Blue Fish
Replies: 24
Views: 11350

Re: Red Fish Blue Fish

Sorry I took so long again to reply, While I appreciate the advice, that just isn't the story I wanted to tell. That's a bit too neat and a bit too obvious. Oh ok, I was just thinking that maybe some more focus on Akira would have been perfect, you know, with the whole yin-yang thing balanced out? R...
by LordDarknus
Sun Nov 25, 2012 7:49 am
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: Some Slight Similarities
Replies: 0
Views: 5513

Some Slight Similarities

I've noticed some images related to Katawa Shoujo, bear a Striking Resemblance to some other things, "Totally Looks Like"s, as it were, totallylookslike.com/ This was by Mike Inel http://mikeinel.deviantart.com/art/Butterfly-Song-292051836 http://th02.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/084/f/8...
by LordDarknus
Sun Nov 25, 2012 7:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Red Fish Blue Fish
Replies: 24
Views: 11350

Re: Red Fish Blue Fish

"Hey, shrimp. What's up?" She said cheerfully. "I was reading this," Lilly started to explain holding up her book. Even though she couldn't do anything more than listen to her books at this point, she always referred to it as reading. "But I didn't understand some of the wo...
by LordDarknus
Sat Nov 24, 2012 11:23 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Katawa Ball Z Kai condensed
Replies: 8
Views: 5224

Katawa Ball Z Kai condensed

This is what happens when you're sleep deprived and you've finally snapped because what you write is poorly received anyway; One day, Iwanako flew to Yamaku, beat up the Nurse and challenged Hisao. She reveals that they were all Saiyans, a proud fighting warrior race. From Space! Iwanako also reveal...
by LordDarknus
Sat Nov 24, 2012 9:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Who Goes There?
Replies: 14
Views: 8194

Re: Who Goes There?

It's ..a good movie. To a lot of people. I'm Sorry if I've spoiled it for you. Don't worry - like I said, it's not likely I'll be watching it in... ever. Sorry, forgot to hit the "Submit" button before closing the browser. But yeah, I implore you to watch John Carpenter's 'The Thing'. It'...
by LordDarknus
Sat Nov 24, 2012 9:27 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trusting my judgement
Replies: 12
Views: 6067

Re: Trusting my judgement

Well that was... unique? I'm not sure exactly what happened here. I'm sorry, It's basically Hisao's take upon Hanako's neutral end where the "trust my judgement"-option was picked over trusting Lilly's advice. Except Hisao's white knighting nature was exaggerated and flanderized to a rath...
by LordDarknus
Fri Nov 23, 2012 3:24 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Trusting my judgement
Replies: 12
Views: 6067

Trusting my judgement

(Hisao narrating, done in about two hours and a half, not a single shred of script format. Hope someone's happy. I need to sleep.) Trusting my judgement http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/328/7/1/not_hanako__s_room_by_lorddarknus-d5m0bw6.jpg I'm not sure what it is about the bed before me, but i...
by LordDarknus
Fri Nov 23, 2012 3:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Shower Scenes
Replies: 207
Views: 140014

Re: Shower Scenes

Glad you liked it. Just being curious, which ending was your favorite? I'm Sorry! I'm Sorry! I was offline, catching up on my sleep, I'm very Sorry! Errm, I think the Misha-route was my favourite, I'm not sure why, but if I'm not reading too much into it; it's because I think Misha and Hisao are wo...
by LordDarknus
Sun Nov 18, 2012 5:03 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Shower Scenes
Replies: 207
Views: 140014

Re: Shower Scenes

I guess I just got the idea in my head to ask her out as a joke and somehow it stuck in there. Now that I actually stop and think about it, I just want to put this entire incident behind me. I walk back to my room. "We exchange a bit of irrelevant small talk as we wait for our food. It's somew...
by LordDarknus
Sun Nov 18, 2012 4:18 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Who Goes There?
Replies: 14
Views: 8194

Re: Who Goes There?

but there are times when it's just not clear what's happening or what has already happened. One pointer for future stories: You might give more attention to the scene changes. A few times it was as if a few lines were missing. For example near the beginning there is a point where the characters are...