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Sperance wrote:Well, shit. This... This is going to be depressing, isn't it?

If I do my job right, very.

In any case, are there any other sites that this community WOULDN'T look down upon? Like a more respectable fanfiction site...? I'd be grateful to know of any. Uh...this forum? I will definitely continue posting here, sure. I think I'll post full chapters instead of links though. I'm definitely ...

No. It was your choice of posting location. Is there some stigma attached to the site I don't know of...? Generally people here aren't to big on fanfiction.net. Probably has to do with alot of the stories on there being amateurish weaboo stuff (not all of them, though). Well I'll try not to do that ...

Mirage_GSM wrote:No. It was your choice of posting location.

Is there some stigma attached to the site I don't know of...?

Mirage_GSM wrote:Too bad. This was promising.

I'm sorry my choice of narrative style disappointed you?

Another note: Added fanfiction.net page. Will post future chapters there henceforth and notify this thread.

Quick note: Added edit for optional accompaniment. Enjoy.

If you're going for past tense, a few more lines should be past perfect, like I knew a painter once, in high school. I was going for a stream-of-counsciousness prose (or perhaps, more appropriately, internal monologue) as is common in noir fiction. This may or may not be in line with what I ...

Just one thing so far: Keep your tenses consistent! You're jumping between past and present tense like a kangaroo.... I figured someone would catch on to that. It was one of my main gripes writing this story. I decided to make it past tense to keep it in line with the noir setting, but it looks ...

So, this is my first serious stab at fanfiction. A bit of background, this is a noir romance/mystery/thriller following Rin's neutral (read: bad) ending, where she leaves Hisao to go to a big art school in Tokyo. I got the idea while browsing fanfiction and seeing different stories that branched ...